My science fiction story “Veil of Ignorance” just went up for sale on Fictionwise.com. This is my best story, according to the Slush God.
I’m quite proud of “Veil of Ignorance.” It employs a shifting first person viewpoint somewhat similar to the one used by Alfred Bester in “Fondly Fahrenheit.” This was an absolute bear to make work. In the three years since I wrote the first draft, I’ve reworked the story countless times to make the point of view trick more clear and consistent. This Fictionwise version includes a few polishes that didn’t appear in the version published in the All the Rage This Year anthology. Basically, going over the story again, I caught a few very, very subtle inconsistencies in the pov: 1) it’s established that the characters know what each other are thinking, but in one or two places they appear not to, and 2) in one spot the viewpoint switches to Dillon, but then a few lines later Dillon is referred to in the third person. Both fixed now.
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